Darkness Enduring
Disclaimer: I do not own the rights to the Big Valley or its characters. This story has chapters unlike my first post. (Yes, I was the kid who kept trying to jam the square peg into the round hole...
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What a way to pull the reader into the story. Gripping and heart-wrenching.
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I feel bad for Jarrod. Hopefully, he can find some happiness among the darkness.
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I wonder who can be in the kitchen downstairs so early and if that person can comfort Jarrod. Good start.
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Great start. You have captured Jarrod's fear, frustration, anger well and just a hint of self pity. Looking forward to more.
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"Mostly Jarrod used the watch to find out what hour it was in the middle of the night when the nightmare woke him." This sentence really defined the way Jarrod's nights progressed. I am caught up in...
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You've gotten into Jarrod's head so well and given such a good description of his feelings in this story. I can't wait to see where you take it.
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It's a good start and you described very much Jarrod's feelings. Right now I'm gonna read the rest!
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